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Renni Grier's avatar

this is just fantastic. first, so much is going on in such a short time holy shit. is it social commentary? satire? fuck if i know this hits.

the real genius here is the after: a main character that will self-harm for money/popularity/validation. the bartender who completely misread the situation. thank you so much for writing this and sharing!

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ava's avatar

Thank you so much!! Yes, a lot going on haha. When I told the idea to my boyfriend last week, he sort of looked at me bewildered and said, "and how long is it going to be?"

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emma girl's avatar

“I’d do myself a terrible disservice not to think of it in that way”😻😻😻

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Grayson's avatar

well. this was amazing

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d3athbyf0resk!n's avatar

THIS WAS SOOO GOODDDDD

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George P Farrell's avatar

Very intimate and authentic. Touching and lonely. Nice.

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Ginger Cook's avatar

Holy shit. ✨ Amazing.

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Vince Roman's avatar

Bowela Abdul

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emma girl's avatar

Omg

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Alan's avatar

I love the theme of appearance as a through-line in this story: how the narrator views their own self and the party goers and John and the wet streets and the motorcycle driver. And how appearances may or may not reveal truths.

The connection between the opening biblical reference and the narrator's subsequent success as a fetish model is fascinating.

Great work, Ava....edgey, thoughtful, and compelling reading.

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ava's avatar

Thank you so much Alan! I always appreciate & am excited for your feedback ❤️

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A. Plotnik's avatar

This was funny, I like the idea of an accidental fetish model who still can't catch a dick. I felt so bad for the bartender, of course. Poor John.

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